Choosing the final book for my week-long focus on the reads of days gone by, in fact, reminded me of this because it turned out to be so surprisingly difficult. I picked up book after book and quickly put them aside again because the memories they invoked were neither pleasant nor even, sometimes, neutral. This negative nostalgia was something I was really not expecting, especially when it attached to books like A Swiftly Tilting Planet!
My nostalgia about this collection of Rilke's poetry isn't purely neutral or positive but it isn't painful. In fact, I sighed a little sigh of relief when I recalled what a bullet I dodged (or, more accurately, which dodged me) - but I'm getting ahead of myself.
Norton's Translations from the Poetry of Rainer Maria Rilke was introduced to me when I was about 20, by a boy with whom I became pretty intensely obsessed. He was brilliant, quiet, thoughtful, awkward - that is, pretty much the exact opposite of all the lummoxes I tended to find myself attracted to at that age. He was also intensely religious in a way I found to be narrow and stifling, and also had some weird ideas about women. He would not have been good for me; being with him would have killed what I now consider to be all the best and most interesting parts of myself. Luckily, after stringing me along a little, he made it clear I was too messy for him and that was that.
BUT! not before introducing me to Rainer Maria Rilke (among others), who really enriched my reading life (especially with his Letters to a Young Poet, which I really need to re-read) by convincing me to read much more widely than I ever had before. In this way, he did me a huge favour even if, no matter how many times I read this poem to myself while thinking of him, he didn't follow:
Do you know, I would quietlyCirca 1995/96, when I first read this collection, this was far and away my favourite poem. I still think it lovely in its simplicity and gentle desire - but it also seems very, very young to me now. Most of the pieces included in the section First Poems seem very young to me, and that's alright and sensible; I am no longer very young myself, and a great deal has changed in 15 years.
slip from the loud circle,
when first I know the pale
stars above the oaks
Ways will I elect
that seldom any tread
in pale evening meadows -
and no dream but this:
You come too. (p. 29)
One section though - The Voices: Nice Pages With a Titlepage - has remained my favourite in Norton's translation. What it's about is best described by the titlepage itself:
The rich and the fortunate may well keep silent,Rilke and/or his translator are so gentle in their adjectives here; already, whomever is to follow this introduction seems beautiful - but to no one but God, and that's the tragedy - in their need and loss. "The Song of the Orphan," I think, is the most powerful of the nine voices (although I'm sure I would have chosen a different one 15 years ago). Here it is:
nobody wants to know what they are.
But the needy have to reveal themselves,
have to say: I am blind,
or: I am about to become so,
or: things are not well with me on earth,
or: I have an ailing child,
or: I am patched together here...
And perhaps that is nowhere near enough.
And since otherwise everyone passes them by,
as they pass things, they have to sing.
And one hears some good singing then too.
Indeed people are strange; they would rather
hear castrati in boy-choirs.
But God himself comes and stays long
when these truncated ones disturb him. (p. 111)
I am nobody and neither shall I be anybody.I don't know if Norton was a great translator. This time around, I noticed how many of his choices in syntax and diction were awkward and ambiguous. Sometimes it seems as though he's simply reproduced the original German in its most literal possible English version. In some cases, this works really well, as in "Ich lag / im Silberhimmel zwischen Traum und Tag" (p. 30) which becomes "I lay / in the silver heaven between dream and day" (p. 31) - which is just a perfect, and perfectly beautiful, line.
Now of course I am still too small for being;
but later too.
Mothers and fathers,
have pity on me.
Indeed it's not worth the trouble of rearing me:
I shall be mowed down all the same.
No one can use me: it's too early now,
and tomorrow it will be too late.
I have only this one dress,
it's wearing thin, and it's fading,
but it will last an eternity
even before God perhaps.
I have only this little bit of hair
(the same always remained),
that once was somebody's dearest.
Now he loves nothing anymore. (p. 125)
But of the poems I've included here, I'm sure you found yourself getting snagged a little on the syntax. And my husband, who can read German, questioned some of his choices, e.g., "Ich habe nur dieses eine Kleid" (p. 124) which seems more like a reference to dress as a general object (i.e., a set of clothes) than to a dress, singular; and, indeed, the link to another translation below has this as a set of clothes and not a dress - and specifying the gender of the poem's narrator if it's not there to begin with is a rather significant change.
Apart from any inaccuracies Norton might have introduced, one would like a smoother read, and yet I still really like Norton's version; perhaps this is nostalgia's greatest power - it forces you to prefer that which may well be fatally imperfect because it's comfortable and it is part of your emotional and intellectual history. I found some other translations of The Voices here which are much smoother, and read more like poems written in English. And yet, Crego's choices seem so bland in comparison. They're clearly the same poems, and yet they don't snag me, in a positive way, the way Norton's do.
Now, back to reading forward instead of backwards, and to developing non-metaphorical wrinkles as I forge bravely ahead into my mid-thirties.
Not much of a poetry person, but I would like to read some Rilke at some point (I think OUP has a bilingual version coming out later this year which would be a good one for me).
On another note, I'm not sure what surprised me more; the fact you're younger than me, or that 1995 was FIFTEEN YEARS AGO!
We're about the same age.
Mid nineties. Odd boys. Poetry. Sigh.
Sounds like you dodged more than one bullet in relation to this book. :)
Think you've got a typo in the first poem, no?
"Ways will I elet" s/b elect?
Happy belated birthday! I hope you had a lovely celebration. I have read Letters to a Young Poet and would like to reread it sometime too. I have somehow managed to not read much in the way of Rilke's actual poems though. I keep meaning to but you know how it goes. I'll have to make sure I have his poetry on my shelf ready to go when the moment arrives.
I had the same kind of experience reading Rilke when I was young (I'm older than you and Trapunto). I'm still fond of the translation I read then, even though it's been superceded by better translations since.
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